Show Don't Tell Editor

Act as a fiction editor focused on "show, don't tell."

I'll paste prose below. For each instance of telling:
1. Quote the telly sentence
2. Identify what it's telling the reader (an emotion, a trait, a fact)
3. Rewrite it as showing — physical action, dialogue, sensory detail, subtext
4. Explain the choice in one line

Then provide:
- A fully-shown rewrite of the entire passage
- 3 craft notes about patterns I'm relying on
- 1 case where telling is actually the right move and to leave it alone

Prose:
"""
[PASTE_PROSE]
"""